Friday, July 31, 2009
Limbo
Tuesday, July 28, 2009
Letter Sent!
Monday, July 27, 2009
Querying still...
Sunday, July 26, 2009
Query Letter, hard edit
Saturday, July 25, 2009
Petrified Birds Sing Petrified Songs
From Drop Box |
Friday, July 24, 2009
Not Much
Thursday, July 23, 2009
Mt. Everts and other pretty things
From Drop Box |
Wednesday, July 22, 2009
Major Day.
I'd decided months ago to try for an agent, but recently talking with a friend, I'm going to revisit that idea and revise that agent letter I wrote a few months back. To keep the creativity flowing, I'll figure out something else to work on too. I've another book idea, but I may take a break to work on poetry and short stories, not sure, but I'll keep you posted.
Tuesday, July 21, 2009
Backside of Mt. Everts
From Drop Box |
Monday, July 20, 2009
Confusion? Nah.
By joyous luck there upon a river stone by the fire lay my fate, the opera glass. Soul sparks and rainbows burned within. I pocketed the prize and limped out of the canyon, through the willowy stream that cuts up at an angle that can be climbed by crawling over boulders. There’s no sun besides, so beginning fire was out of the question. All I could do is try to keep moving homeward. Upon the flats, the wind howled still and flakes turned to frozen pellets blasting away at my tattered skin. Vision so obscured, I crawled, bush to boulder, bolder to bush. Endurance, I told myself, endurance. Like that, I traveled for eternity -- bush to boulder, bolder to bush -- following my feet and hands for I haven’t found home in my heart. I knew not where I was going. Hope, once more was extinguished like any flame I once had. I sat leeward of a big sage. Mind emptying, slumber, body so cold it’s warm, and still a fly tearing bloodied patches of skin from my scratched, burned and boiled cheek.
I must have slept, because I awoke warmed. The snow had stopped, the wind slowed, and the clouds parted above me and beams flowed down like dreams. Quick to the lens I was. I’d already made a small stash of kindle just for this – I kept in my only pocket not ripped. Quickly, I piled it tipi-like and fumbled with the glass. My fingers. My fingers didn’t work. I couldn’t move them. Like a statues hands were mine. I could bend barely at the hand’s joint, but no further out on the digits. The glass fell to the ground and with both hands, gripping like clubs, I was able to grasp the lens and hold it steady in my palms. Steady enough. More firm, steady to light this fire, to light it takes patience, endurance. On my knees, with palms outstretched, I funneled the light, prayed the light through the lens. Not letting this moment pass means life, to not focus and let it slip away is death. Again, I empty my mind, traveled to the far reaches. I can do this. Focusing, passing the realm of slumber, I enter dream. High above a green field I floated belly down, sun to my back, and I see a dot edged with summer Cottonwoods in a sea of dry prairie grass stretching at all sides for hundreds of miles in all directions. Through the golden ocean runs a ribbon of green trees to the South. Descending from the clouds, a home appears, modest, within the shelter-belt. There’s neat rows, a garden I’d say. The decent is leisurely -- to the garden. The sun is so warm on this cool day. It must be late spring or early summer, and to my surprise, there’s a man working the garden. He’s a wide straw hat. “Who are you?” I call from my cloud. He turns his head and his face filled with smoke furls. They rose and burst when they hit the wind. A flame! Red glowing, growing, a flame! A fire. Fire! Life! I shall live, I shall live to see tomorrow.
That’s how it happened. That’s how I got fire. I know nothing of the day-vision, nor how I could not shake long enough to create a flame, but I’ve been tending ever since. Again, the wind rose, clouds regrouped, and the snow has recommenced. Like a horse, I keep my ass to the wind, to protect it still, I keep in the shadow of a Big Sage. With its help, I’m able to block enough wind to keep my flame fluttering. With much difficulty and tenderness this life is alive.
Sleep, though, is impossible.
Too, food seems distant,
so distant that I forgot
what the empty hole inside feels like.
I know I’m thinning, thinning quickly.
I can see my ribs draped in thin skin
covered in dried blood
from fall and the scrapes.
I don’t think about food.
I can’t think about food.
My body aches for food,
so I don’t have to think about food.
Lack of food will not kill me
tonight.
To sleep means the end of fire
which would mean a dark morrow.
I will not die --
I know this.
I have endured.
So I will not sleep.
Tomorrow, at break of dawn,
I know not where I will go, but I will survive.
I will simply follow my soul.
Sunday, July 19, 2009
Grand Canyon of the Yellowstone
From Drop Box |
A Photo and an Article
Saturday, July 18, 2009
Something Different
Thursday, July 16, 2009
Truman's Mother and Father
From Lost Man:
She was such a quiet one, but she could carry a scold for walking in the house with dusty boots or leaving the living room a mess. Yet, she was the caring one, in her glances, warm loving eyes, and a soft rustle of hair is how she showed her love. I still don’t see how she could have stayed with my cold father. I didn’t know it either, not until Kurtz told me. It was the weirdest thing, because it’s the only time in all those years that he ever told me anything about my family.
The day of the trip, the Yellowstone I can’t remember, but I do remember going to him before we departed, making sure he’s alright, he was right sick. I could never forget his pale face and sunken eyes.
It was before dawn, we’d only greeted each other, and he said, “You wish to know how your parents met?”
I was taken by surprise, “Yes, but they’re dead.”
“Hmm,” and we sat there at his kitchen bar drinking coffee near his murky library.
“So, I’ll never know,” I said to just to break the silence.
“I believe you are old enough. Your wounds are healed and you are but scar tissue now, so not much could hurt you,” he was thinking aloud, but one look in his hollow eyes, and you could see a storm of contemplation.
“What are you talking about, Kurtz? We was talking about how my parents met. Are you thinking of those damn bison again? I haven’t checked the line, but assure you, everything is locked down tight.”
“Truman, no. My cattle are secure, and the bison are on the right side of the fence. I too was speaking of how your parents met. He told me once.”
Like a whistle it was always there, screaming in the background, I thought it was the fridge motor, but no, it was the
bomb falling.
“You know? How?” I was clench-jawed and dumbfounded; surely, I believed that knowledge to be dead with my parents.
“He told me,” was simply all he said.
“And what did he tell you?” I prodded. I know you have to dig deep with Kurtz, and I never tried to pry before because I respect the man -- his privacy, he saved my skin and my family’s property.
“He told me that he saved your mother’s life.”
I knew that. That is what my mother always said too, never him, though. I took it as a lie to cover up the fact that they met at the Bucking Horse Sale or something else equally slimy, but she never told me.
So, brokenly, I said, “I knew that. At least I’d heard it, not believed it.”
“Did he tell you how? Did she tell you how?”
“Never,” was all I could reply.
“Hmm,” was all he replied.
We sat for a moment in the shared, pregnant silence. He poured another cup of coffee, and then began, “I’ll the story as I remember: One winter night, many moons ago, a cow got loose from your father’s herd. It wandered loose, disillusioned in the blinding storm. Your father went after her on foot with a thick coat and a flashlight. He found her near here. The storm was worse by then, blizzarding to beat heck, as they would say around here. He knocked. I answered. We lodged the heifer in my barn for the night. He called home to your mother telling he was alright and that he’d be staying at my place for the respite. I took him to my study, and I cracked the red-wax seal on a bottle of Marker’s Mark. We drank the bottle and talked through the night to sound of the crackling fire and howling wind. He told me how he found your mother. I didn’t ask, he just began, and I tell it to you like he told it to me. He told:
‘I was an old man when I met Elizabeth – seventy-four. I’d already ranched my whole life into what most would call a retirement, but a rancher never retires. It was summer time. I’d like to travel to see rodeos around the counties, so it was that I was in Helena at the Last Chance Stampede. It was the end of July, hotter’n hell. I sweated through my hat and my feet swam in my boots. I was early, so I took a late-afternoon walk around the grounds, they have a lovely fairgrounds -- trees, a stream, and tranquil walking paths around the acres. I took off for the stream and trees to find shade and cool. I was deep back in the thicket, near the back and I was nearly on my way back. Came around a bend an found a braided chinaman with a machete readied to cut this girl’s throat. She was on her knees, hands tied behind her back, blindfolded. He had her hair knotted in one hand and the blade on her neck with the other. The deed and just begun, and a trickle of blood ran down her neck, staining the shoulder of her sun dress.
I yelled, “Hey! What’re you doing?! Get the hell away from her!”
He only glared at me, pissed that I had discovered his deed. Our eyes narrowed on each other, and I decided action was necessary, I ran at him. He dropped her, and with two hands, pointed his blade at me in some karate-jew-jit-su-shit move. I stopped before I got my head taken off. I reached behind me, like I was grabbing for my pistol, which I didn’t have. We stared at each other and breathed deep breathes. I remember how labored and intense those moments were. I offered, “What’re you doing? She’s just a girl.”
“Getaway,” he told me.
“No, not without an explanation, and not without her,” I told him, and he held the machete for a moment and lowered it.
“I sell her. Dis is what I do,” he said.
“You can’t sell a dead body,” I said.
“I sell dead girl. Pay more dan live girl.”
I was startled, “How’s that work, chink?”
"Minghun. Not for you know.”
“I take her, and I go to police, chink. What you think about that?”
“NO!” He yelled at me.
“Then how about you, me, and the girl go on over to the beer garden and talk this thing out.”
He held that blade at me for a long time, relenting, he put it down and nodded me on.
We drank beer, many beers.
She didn’t say a word, and drank nothing, because she was sixteen.
The old chink, told me that he gave up farming because of all the racist asshole in the valley. He took up bride selling instead. There’s a Chinese population in Helena, from the old railroad days. They keep to themselves, I never even knew they’re there. Thought they all went back to Chinaland or California. He told that in Chinese custom, the son must have a wife, even in death, or his soul will wander or some shit like that. The husband’s family finds him a wife, pays the family for her, and they marry him to her. His soul is represented by a doll, and she marries the doll, but the marriage is also his funeral. Dongyang, that was his name, Dongyang, said he got paid $1,600 for a live bride, $1,000 for a whore, or if he found a suitable recently dead bride, he could get $2,000 either way. A family with a dead son didn’t want a widow to take care of, so a dead girl is more desirable, making her more expensive. So, he made more money off dead girls. And because they’re so far from China, they’d take any dead girl, and because a dead girl was harder to find, he’d make his own dead girls.
I asked him, “Where’d you get her?” pointing to the blond haired girl.
“I buy her. Good used, cheap.”
“Where? How?” I asked him.
“I go to trailer-park. I knock on door. I ask for young girl. They think sex. I say, ‘no, buy.’ And I buy her for $1,200. Sell her for $2,000. Make $800,” he said so businesslike.
I couldn’t believe it. The absurdity, the cruelty of it, so I bought her for $2,000, alive. He insisted that I had to marry her, because of his values. “I sell wife, not whore. I no pimp,” he told me. So, I missed the Saturday rodeo talking with the chink and buying my bride. I stayed in town until Monday morning. Fresh at nine, we got married. I didn’t even know her name until that morning. She hadn’t even spoken to me until then. She only said, “Thank you. I do.” Dongyang and some clerk signed the witness sheet, I paid my $80 for the license, $2,000 to Dongyang, and I brought her back here. A year later I had my son, and that’s when you moved in, Kurtz.’
That’s how he told it to me, Truman. I kept it from you because it seemed so disruptive. I had no intention of taking this information with me to the grave. This seemed like as good of a time as any.”
I sat in silence, stunned at revelation.
“Truman, I hope I haven’t hurt you. I thought you’d want to hear the truth, at least what your father told me,” Kurtz was consoling. I’d never seen him act so, but I wasn’t ready for consoling.
I cried. I cried for my mother.Wednesday, July 15, 2009
Pictures
The first one here, I don't know what to think. I get the idea that in the middle there might be an overhead view of a river. I think I believe this to be an over head simply because of his Yellowstone Lake drawing below.The second one here I believe to be of the grand canyon of the Yellowstone, but again, I have my doubts because of the river looking thing at the bottom of the drawing, but I love this one!
The third one is of Yellowstone Lake, he even labels it so. This exploration party created the first real drawings of the lake, before this it was known there was a lake, but the shape and size was totally unknown. Hauser again isn't mentioned as being one of the first to create this drawing, that is attributed to Langford, who drew it all from the top of a mountain on the east side of the lake, which was subsequently named after him and this feat. After reading Langford's journal again recently, there was a lot of copying of journals going on, which was to save time and have a separate reference of the trip. So, Hauser could have copied Langford's drawing is all I'm trying to get at, or he could have drawn his own. I don't know. Either way, it's a great drawing.
I plan on using a cropped version of the drawings randomly dropped into the my story, which is in journal form to add a little spice and wonder to my story. Oh, as a random aside, part of the goal with this book was to mix reality and fiction. I take true historic events, people, and quotations and place them into my story. Some are quite obvious in their reference, others are built right into the characters dialog. I have found this to be one of the hardest aspects of this project, it guides the work in a certain direction, which I flow with, and in the end, I have a dillema still, I'd like those quotations to simply be in my manuscript without quotation marks, footnotes, or anything else. That they sit there like they are part of the flow of the story, but also little gems for the reader to discover if they so choose to discover for themselves. Yet, not quoting others' words is unethical and perhaps a little illegal. So far I've been highlighting the parts that I'd like to see removed before publication, which includes citations. So that's the writing life for now. Peace.
Sunday, July 12, 2009
Mother of Truman
I realized that his mother's role is low in the story, which wasn't surprising, but her depth of character and story is severely lacking, so I'm creating a section to tell her backstory.
Here are my notes:
Friday, Jan. 26, 2007 12:15 PST
http://www.salon.com/mwt/broadsheet/2007/01/26/ghost_brides/
Killing and selling women as "ghost brides"
Farmer Yang Dongyan bought a woman for $1,600 with the intention of selling her as a live bride. But then he discovered that the woman could command $2,077 as a "ghost bride" to be buried alongside a deceased man and provide companionship in the afterlife. So he "killed the woman in a ditch, bagged her body, and sold her" to an undertaker. Wiser to the superior moneymaking possibilities of selling dead woman rather than live women, Dongyan then killed a prostitute he had "used before" and sold her for a lesser $1,000 (because she was less attractive than the first victim, he told a local paper). It's no surprise that Dongyan had every intention of continuing his disturbing scheme: "If I had not been caught this early, I would've done it again."For story:
- Tru hears from his mother -- father saved her life and she fell in love
- Kurtz tells Tru
- TruII told Kurtz over a bottle of whiskey one cold winter night during a blizzard, cow got out and TruII went to receive it from Kurtz's.
- Set it in Helena at the Last Chance Stampede and Fair.
- TruII buys her in the ditch behind the fairgrounds before her neck is cut by Dongyan, but it's agree that he must marry her, because of Dongyan's values.
- Use Dongyan's story, as back-story, and Tru's mother is sold to his father, instead of for another family's ghost bride.
- Dongyan tell TruII this over a beer at the gardens at the final night of the rodeo
- Dongyan insists on being at the wedding
- Wedding is Monday morning, early, at the court house in Helena.
Friday, July 10, 2009
writer
I've been working a manuscript, Lost Man, for about five years now, part-time. So, what's it about? Here's the blurb I've written so far for my query letter:
Lost Man is a story of survival in the wilds of Yellowstone, and upon finding that you are actively seeking writers from the Pacific Northwest and represented similar works as Disappearance: A Map and Into the Forest, your representation for my manuscript would be a very apt match. The lost man is Truman Everts, and he never knew his grandfather or his history, and he had never traveled the fifty miles to Yellowstone National Park. His father was too routine, too stoic for a family vacation, and his is quite, complicit mother died young. Now, Truman is living in his family home, working for Kurtz the ex-buffalo rancher who raised him, and beer drinking with his best friend Todd.
On a whim he treks to the fabled Yellowstone with Todd, traveling the same route of his grandfather, 130 years yore. On the day of return, he finds Kurtz’s open hearse bumping up the gravel road. A snow unleashes in the September air stranding Truman in his home without power and a mighty case of the flu. All collapses, he loses all – his job, savings, health, Kurtz, and rationality. Grasping with all extremities he finds, in the recess of the family bookcase, his grandfather’s writings – a personal tale, lost alone in Yellowstone for 37 days -- a history to soon parallel his own. Screams of a mountain lion, cat tracks in the snow, and his fevered mind strikes him on a fool’s flight into the wild wintery forest. Lost Man jumbles historical events, characters, and quotes with modern fiction in a seemingly illusory realm. It’s a fervent survival tale, taking the reader down the rabbit-hole of a family’s history to find what it really means to live.
The draft is complete, and I've now revised it three times. I'm working on the 4th revision, which is the first time all the way through. Given, some chapters have been revised more than that, and some have been deleted, and some have been moved around in manuscript. Of the 100 or so pages, single spaced, in Word, I've written, I'm at about page 80, so I'm nearly there. Woot!
I had the goal of putting out letters to agents, which I've read is the best way to go for fiction, by April, but after I did the 3rd edit and plugged all the pieces togeteher, I was at about 42,000 words, and the "normal" novel is about 50,000. I knew places to add in some backstory, sidestory and rewordings to make more sense where I knew it was lacking. Any way, as of today, the manuscript is up to 46,000 words, and there's a big section about Truman's mother and how she met his father, which I'm currently working on and will add a least another 1,000 words or more. I'll describe that later.
Now that I've jumped into this. I'll just write about what I'm writing about as I go along.
So here it is, a writer's journal for the those who wish to read.